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Hi Jbox19! I don't know if your question at the top is directed at me, but I'll answer it anyway :) If you'd like to add an image of that document to this article, you would be able to. You would need to save the image to your computer and then upload it to Wikimedia Commons. We have a training here on uploading images and media to Commons. You'd want to click the the blue "upload" box in the upper right corner of the screen and follow the directions of the Upload Wizard. Most of it is pretty self-explanatory--it will want you to provide the resource for where you found the image and why you're sure it meets the licensing requirements of Commons (in this case, the document is old and it is within the public domain).

  • Watch out for peacock words and phrases that can come off as excessively promotional. I'm seeing some promotional language in the following:
    • instrumental
    • "critical" moment
    • orchestrating
  • Last sentence in "Early life, education, and accomplishments" section is uncited. In general, it's a red flag for a paragraph or a sentence to end without a citation. It's okay for multiple consecutive sentences to be cited once and the end of the consecutive sentences. Therefore, it always catches my eye when any block of text ends without a citation.
    • "She would have the newspapers placed on the relevant legislators' desks, making the support appear spontaneous and widespread." also uncited
    • "Trout and Booth used this card system to study and categorize legislators, and build a non partisan coalition of support for their cause (there were Progressive, Democratic, Republican, and Socialist members of the legislature)." also uncited
    • "Wells ignored the directions and marched alongside her Illinois cohorts." also uncited
    • "Trout died on October 21, 1955 in Jacksonville, Florida and was buried in Evergreen Cemetery in Jacksonville, Florida"
    • "In 1920, Trout ended her suffrage career when IESA disbanded and transformed to the League of Women Voters of Illinois."
  • This sentence is somewhat long and confusing: "He described Booth's systematic and analytical use of a homemade card catalogue, on which she pasted a picture of every member, cut from an Illinois Blue Book, and then noted things like their voting record, likely support, as well as things like whether they could be appealed to for fair play and how the member's wife felt about suffrage" ...perhaps it could be split into two sentences for clarity
  • Try to avoid cliches/idioms "an approach that struck a chord with many citizens"
  • "the day before Wilson's inauguration" I think it would be best to say and link the full name Woodrow Wilson for clarity (not all readers of English Wikipedia are Americans, and admittedly, not all Americans would immediately know who President Wilson was)
  • You introduce the term "Illinois Law" without explaining what it is. I assume it's related to the content in "Why IESA succeeded in 1913"? If so, you could add a sentence towards the end of that section saying "This 1913 legislation, known as the Illinois Law, gave the women of Illinois limited suffrage". Right now, the section is unclear as to "what" they succeeded at.
  • "Trout wrote that she initially took on the state presidency" this phrasing is a bit confusing. My first thought was "states don't have presidents", but I can see now that you're referring to IESA. Better to say that instead of "state".
  • I've set you up on the path of the short footnote usage, but can see there are still some citations that need to be converted. I sent you a short video on Slack that you may find useful. Also, I couldn't do the short footnotes for the Buechler reference because it wasn't listed.
  • You may want to add an infobox. Many Wikipedia articles have them, though they aren't required. See Carrie Chapman Catt, Alice Paul, and Elizabeth Cady Stanton for example. How you insert one:
    • Go to edit mode
    • Put cursor at the top of the article
    • Click "insert" then "template"
    • Type "infobox person"
  • The only required content for infobox person is "name", but you can explore the fields in "add more information" to see opportunities to add birth date, birth place, death date, death place, nationality, and many other relevant fields.

Let me know via slack/email/here on Wikipedia if you need additional help with this! Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:44, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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