User talk:Jbarbeau1300/sandbox

Great job with the emphasis of lymph nodes in the mechanism/pathophysiology section.
I noticed there wasn’t a section discussing further research, maybe add that and discuss what scientists are doing now regarding Follicular hyperplasia.
No clear explanation of what a lymphadenopathy is, so more emphasis on that.
In the Prevention/Treatment section, explain the negative effects of at least 2 medications so the reader can understand the severity.

Thank you for your suggestions! I have now added a "Current Research" tab with relevant information that was conducted in 2019. --Jbarbeau1300 (talk) 02:36, 16 December 2020 (UTC) Aichakay26 (talk) 20:20, 17 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

There are some words that you use for the first time that you might want to link to their Wikipedia page such as lymphadenopathies because readers may not know what that is because there is no explanation in your article.
The structure of your article looks great.
I liked the explanation of the treatment/prevention section; it was very informative.

Thank you for your constructive analysis, I went through and added links to scientific jargon and tried to simplify some of the fancy terms, and I also added more links to other wiki pages for clarification. --Jbarbeau1300 (talk) 02:36, 16 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

--Stpatel137 (talk) 22:50, 18 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Nicely written! Great job utilizing many sources, as well as putting in many in-text links to help the reader with potential unknown words. I like the way the article was structured, it made it quite easy to read.
In the signs & symptoms section, consider discussing if there are any variations in symptoms such as between sexes or age groups.
I would recommend making the mechanism more specific, such as including the specific proteins that are involved.
Include more detail in the Diagnosis section, such as specifically including what blood test is performed or what imaging modality is used. You could also include how the biopsy is performed.

Thank you for your comments! So this is non-gender and non-age specific disease which I have stated in other sections, but I added to this section as well. I also added a few proteins that are commonly found in the immunostaining during diagnosis. The biopsy is preformed as a normal biopsy, by removing a small portion of tissues from affected area, so I don't feel the need to include this. I also added a few proteins that are involved, such as CD20 and CD79. --Jbarbeau1300 (talk) 02:36, 16 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Iolejniczak (talk) 04:29, 19 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Some of the terms are a little hard to understand. Make sure you only use jargon where it's necessary, and when you do, define and/or link it. Without specialized knowledge, would you have any idea what this was about from the abstract?
The first sentence of causes doesn't really give enough context to understand the list.
Mechanism doesn't really clearly connect all the things you're talking about to your condition.
Missing recent research
Lots of good information and well-organized.

--Sweiner02 (talk) 01:38, 22 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your comments and suggestions. I tried my best to simplify some of the terms that I had on there originally. I also added more wiki links to some of the more scientific terminologies so that basically anyone can read. I edited the first sentence that was actually already there before I started adding content, so I just modified it for better clarification. I also added a current research section and discussed a rare follicular hyperplasia disease that was treated by surgical removal. I also tried to update the mechanisms for follicular hyperplasia the best way that I could given the information that I could find. --Jbarbeau1300 (talk) 02:36, 16 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]