User talk:Jacktuj21794/Australian deaf community

My apologies, Jack - I don't know what happened here; thanks for bringing this to my attention! You're in great shape: there are a handful of minor errors/edits that we can deal with later but you're well ahead of where I was hoping that students would be at this point, so take a moment to relax a little. (I hope my lack of feedback didn't cause you any additional stress!) I'm excited to see how this continues to take shape.

Oh, one quick comment regarding wiki-work: since this is such a substantial set of revisions to the existing article, I recommend that you be very intentional about moving over small sections at a time when you're ready to go live. (Not that you need to wait for time to pass between edits: just copy/paste section-by-section, rather than all at once, and provide a justification for each edit.

Matthall.research (talk) 19:58, 8 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review:

Hey Jack! I loved reading your article. I think you are way ahead of the game and have given me a lot of ideas for how to style and format my article, thank you! Also, your comments in class are always very thought provoking and challenge my thinking. Thank you so much for being so thoughtful in class! Below is the formal peer review.

What you are doing well:

Honestly, you are doing everything well so far! You have great sources, and your content is laid out well and easy to read. I can tell you put a lot of research into writing this article, well done!

Possible Changes:

The one possible change I noticed was the amount of words like "most" and "all" you use. One example of that is when you say that "most Deaf children are not born to Deaf parents". I think oftentimes using the word "most" can be confusing to the reader, especially when there is no qualification for what "most" means. Is there a statistic you can pull from? Or maybe just say "many" instead?

Great ideas that inspired me:

I loved your paragraph about medicine! I think talking about cochlear implants and hearing aids is very important when talking about Deaf culture and the Deaf experience. I will definitely be looking into possibly making a section like this for my article.

Thank you for your feedback! I agree now with your explanation of needing to qualify or be more specific when I say "most" and "all," I can see how that can be confusing. I'll go through the writing again and clear it up. Thanks! Jacktuj21794 (talk) 17:05, 14 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]