User talk:Ivychen0619/Jiangxi cuisine

Hi, I'm starting to walk through articles and give everyone informal early feedback on how they're doing. You'll notice this is a little bit form-letter-ish but I hope it is still helpful!

First, I want to say I'm very impressed by the work I see you've done so far. What's needed next is to refine the text you have. My general take right now is that you're making good progress on this article, so please keep working. Be sure to incorporate feedback from the peer review. You might find it helpful to apply the peer review guide to your own article as you think about where to go next.

In addition, you might find it useful to run your article through a grammar checking program to streamline the text and eliminate errors. You should also look at some of your word choices -- for example, "famous" is perhaps an exaggeration, but "widely known" is okay if you have a citation to go with it.

Kaylea Champion (talk) 05:28, 26 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Peer review feedback from Frank

Hi Ivy, here are some peer review feedback I have for your article.

Firstly, I like how your added content is relevant and up to date and your tone is neutral and unbiased. Good job!

Your lead section provides a good introduction to the general information regarding Jiangxi cuisine, and somewhat reflects the new content added in the article. Would recommend adding a brief section about the history of Jiangxi cuisine in the lead section.

The geographic image of Jiangxi province enhance the understanding of the topic and I really like it. One suggestion is it could be cool to connect the map again when talking about genres (what genres are in which regions of Jiangxi province).

Additionally, you can consider moving “The Charm of Jiangxi Cuisine” before “Notable Dishes” as it makes more sense to further explain the flavors of Jiangxi cuisine right after their characteristics.

Overall, your added content improved the quality of the article, by focusing on its history and background but also diversity and subcategories within Jiangxi cuisine. I think you can expand on the history section, or how it differentiates from Sichuan or Hunan cuisine. Lastly, there are some grammatical errors that should be fixed. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ivychen0619/Jiangxi_cuisine/FrankChen1999_Peer_Review#Evaluate_the_drafted_changes FrankChen1999 (talk) 04:46, 29 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Updated feedback from Kaylea

Hi @Ivychen0619:

This is getting close. But, we need to fix the references before the article goes live. Many of them point to the library database that you used to find the source, instead of the source itself. If you have the DOI or ISBN number, that can often be used to look up the full details. Keep working, you are almost there!

Kaylea Champion (talk) 00:08, 10 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Ivychen0619:

You asked me to take another look -- the problem I'm seeing is with these 3:

"https://alliance-primo.hosted.exlibrisgroup.com/primo-explore/fulldisplay?docid=TN_cdi_doaj_primary_oai_doaj_org_article_7c7e8e27d07d4c98b10043c6a98a29a0&vid=UW&search_scope=all&tab=default_tab&lang=en_US&context=PC". alliance-primo.hosted.exlibrisgroup.com. Retrieved 2022-01-22. {{cite web}}: External link in |title= (help)

and

"https://alliance-primo.hosted.exlibrisgroup.com/primo-explore/fulldisplay?docid=TN_cdi_chongqing_primary_3001280656&vid=UW&lang=en_US&context=L". alliance-primo.hosted.exlibrisgroup.com. Retrieved 2022-01-22. {{cite web}}: External link in |title= (help)

and

"https://alliance-primo.hosted.exlibrisgroup.com/primo-explore/fulldisplay?docid=TN_cdi_informaworld_taylorfrancisbooks_10_4324_9780429309588_9_version2&vid=UW&search_scope=all&tab=default_tab&lang=en_US&context=PC". alliance-primo.hosted.exlibrisgroup.com. Retrieved 2022-01-22. {{cite web}}: External link in |title= (help)

The reason these have a red error in the references section is that the link you are using is a special UW-only link. Other people will not be able to find these books with this reference. What you will want to do for these items is make a normal bibliographic entry for them using the citation wizard. For example, the last one is a book chapter. So you'd open up the citation wizard, and then fill in the details -- the chapter title (The Gan People of Jiangxi Province), the author (Moser, Leo J), the publisher (Routledge), the book title (The Chinese Mosaic: The Peoples and Provinces of China), and the year (1985).

Let me know when you've had a chance to fix these and I'll take another look.

Kaylea Champion (talk) 02:07, 12 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Go Live Approval

Hi @Ivychen0619:

You are approved to go live with this article.

As a reminder, here are our go-live steps:

Final read-through draft.
Check live article for changes. [History Tab]
Two browsers side by side, if you can. Source editing mode ("Code mode"), not visual editor.
Paragraph by paragraph copy, leaving behind an explanatory edit summary after each chunk of changes.
Note on article talk page.
Note at the top of your sandbox version.
Submit a link to your article on Canvas.
Celebrate!

Kaylea Champion (talk) 23:17, 12 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]