User talk:I6137435

Feedback on your article

Hello I6137435, Thank you for writing your article in your sandbox! I have read the article and would like to give some feedback to improve your article to Wikipedia standards and customs. While your tutor will judge it content wise, I will look if it meets the quality standards we have on Wikipedia. I standard look for a series of subjects that need improvement or are okay.

Intro sentence: I think you try to put too much in the first sentence. I would split the sentence and describe the topics in a second sentence. The first sentence then can be something like "... is a book written in 1878 by the English physicist Daniel Hack Tuke."
Links: the text is missing...
Headers: After the intro section I would start with the context & timeframe, then with the contents, and then with the reception of the book. You can say something about the author, but I think this might be the best to be added in the intro section or Context/Timeframe section.
References: missing... Please use inline references: references you add behind the dot of a sentence. For every paragraph you need to add at least one inline reference. Also every 2 or 3 sentences need a reference.
Context/timeframe: missing
How was the book received: missing

I hope you can implement this feedback to your sandbox article before our coming meeting. Thanks! Romaine (talk) 09:35, 25 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Today a new review:

Intro sentence: sufficient
Links: a few more please, like: "English", "physicist", "medicinal psychology", etc.
Headers: parts of the article are still missing...
Context/timeframe: good!
How was the book received: missing...
References: Please add the references behind the dot, not before. For the parts written: sufficient references so far.
Other: Also a (longer) description of the book is still missing.

The current version is what we expected from you a week ago. With todays session your article should be much closer to complete. I hope you can work hard to be much more ready for today's session. Thanks! Romaine (talk) 08:01, 2 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]