User talk:Howarddog/sandbox

Wane's feedback

Sustain Adding citations to facts that was contributed to the lead section, execution section, and editing each subsections to make it more readable. Keeping the information already added on the page is great idea. The title is clear to who the page is about. The lead section describe what the topic is on the first sentence. Editing out some words that makes the paragraph confusing is a good idea. Overall, I think you made enough contribution to consider it being rated higher. Without knowing who he is from the beginning, I was able to clearly know who is by reading the lead section.

Improve Add more content about his childhood, school hood, maybe his family life. Adding more citations to the facts that are being put in the Wikipedia page. Going over to correct and improve some sentence fragments, grammars, and spellings in the subsections.