User talk:Hm19921

We decided on our sections of the introduction, summary, publication, and references as we thought this briefly showed the outline and background to the short story. We wanted to include a cultural impact section; however, we were unable to find enough information on the topic to place it into its own section. Therefore, we decided to include the information we found in the introduction. We wanted our paragraphs in our introduction in this order as it made sense to have an introduction about Mary de Morgan and her works first then a brief overview of the short story. In addition, we wanted to include an image; however, since this page is still under review, uploading images is not possible as the page is still undergoing validation. Hm19921 (talk) 23:05, 12 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The introduction could be shorter as part of it includes a summary portion, by removing that it can be made more concise. The plot summary will cover that section so it is unnecessary in the introduction. The plot summary should be made shorter by removing some quotes. Ubcoenglish212kro (talk) 00:45, 15 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Watch out for run-on sentences. There seem to be quite a few in the first two sections of this page. FernYtoos (talk) 00:46, 15 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]