User talk:HenryJeon/sandbox
Henry, I enjoyed reading all the facts you put in for this fungus! Nice flow and very comprehensive information! I recommend going to mycobank to get more fun facts about morphology of the organism. For example, quality of the media and environmental conditions can affect the shape of the sporangiospores; studies suggest that Previous study suggested that spherical sporangiospores originate from sporangia with dry walls were usually isolated from tall sporangiophores; while moist sporangia usually contain cylindrical-ellipsoidal spores that were sticking together.
http://www.mycobank.org/BioloMICS.aspx?TableKey=14682616000000063&Rec=15865&Fields=All
Besides that, please check this paper if you would like to add more information on reproduction.
For pathogenicity-related topics, please check sources listed below.
http://hortsci.ashspublications.org/content/25/5/549.abstract
I have also found a book that might provide useful facts as well, please check.
I hope these sources can be helpful in editing the article!
Nannan sun (talk) 04:12, 27 October 2017 (UTC)
Hi! I just looked over your article and it looks pretty good so far! I just have a few suggestions that might be helpful for you.
First, for the History part, its great that you put where it was discovered and the classifications. However, maybe you could also add in a definition of what your species is at the beginning a well? It would help tie in the sentences together.
Second, for your Physiology and Reproduction sections, maybe you can expand more on your facts for those who do not have the same background knowledge as we do? Such as for Reproduction, your species is under the phylum Zygomycota and it undergoes asexual reproduction. You could possibly give some background information on this and expand briefly how it affects Mucor mucedo or even make the word Zygomycota a wiki link so readers can click on that to get more information to better understand your article.
Lastly, I noticed that your References section is not listing all your references properly. I actually had a problem with this as well, but I was able to fix it by re-copying the code from our class Wikipedia dashboard (and changing it to your own references) and then make sure you do proper citations for all your facts. The references might not be showing up because you may have cited a few wrong? It finally worked for me after a few tries.
I hope this helps! Good luck! Akhalya.i (talk) 16:36, 27 October 2017 (UTC)
Good job on the article outline! Here are some of the things you may want to add. I think you should add an introduction section. It is the first thing I read when I check wikipedia for information. It should include some basic yet important information about your fungus (for example the common name: pin mould, its habitat..). You may also want to add a disease section and also talk about its impact on agriculture. Here are some links that you may find useful: http://hortsci.ashspublications.org/content/25/5/549.full.pdf https://search-proquest-com.myaccess.library.utoronto.ca/docview/1666808056?pq-origsite=summon http://www.dbpia.co.kr.myaccess.library.utoronto.ca/Journal/ArticleDetail/NODE06753804 I also noticed that some of your references are not showing, so you should fix that (unfortunately I don't know how). Good luck with the assignment!Basmaz92 (talk) 18:27, 27 October 2017 (UTC)
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[edit]Hi! Great job! Here are some suggestions that may be helpful. I think it would be good to clarify some of the more scientific jargon that you use. These articles are for the general public and so it's good to be mindful of the knowledge gap there. For example, the (+) and (-) strain idea might require some extra clarification. Also, it would be helpful to add wikipedia links. This way, you don't have to define every term you use. Words like sporangia and hypae already have wikipedia pages, so it's easy to link to them and that allows the public to better understand the jargon. It may also be helpful to add any info about its pathogenicity (whether it's harmful to humans/animals or not). Some information on the physiology would also be helpful, as well as any common names that may be used in place of its Latin name. Here are some links to articles to help you expand on these topics: https://search-proquest-com.myaccess.library.utoronto.ca/docview/1785165755?pq-origsite=summon&accountid=14771 http://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/10.1111/j.1432-1033.1977.tb11918.x/full You may also want to take a look at the formatting of your references. Try copying the source code from the class page again. Finally, there is lots of cool information out there about sexual hormones produced in your fungus. This would be a unique and interesting section to add to your article. Here are some sources: http://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0031942200856630 http://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0031942200856630 Good luck! Persiamariah (talk) 21:54, 27 October 2017 (UTC)
Hey Henry!
- I just read over you article outline and you seem to have a good foundation for it so far. However I’d like to provide some suggestions that might help you to further edit your article.
- First in the History and taxonomy section, it seems like the link for P.A. Micheli is incorrectly linked to the wiki page ( https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pier_Antonio_Micheli ) since it’s showing up as the page not existing. It seems like there was lots of changes made in its taxonomy, so the description seems to be a bit confusing. Maybe if you state the dates at the beginning of the sentences, the chronological order will give a bit more organization to the overall structure. Also for the last sentence (Common name is the common pinmould), you can link pin mold to the Mucorales wiki page (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mucorales ) and maybe clarify that this common name is due to the classification(order) the species is under.
- In the Growth and morphology section, lots of the information you provide is about the different structures of the species. I think it would be useful if information about the overall growth of the colonies are provided such as the relative growth rate and general visual observations(such as size and shape), which will support more general aspects of the fungus like the color of the colony that you provided. Also within this section, providing links to the corresponding wiki pages for general vocabulary used within the course is helpful for the general reader, some suggested words are heterothallic (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Heterothallism ), zygospore (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Zygospore ), sporangia (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sporangium ), and hyphae (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hypha ) to suggest a couple.
- For the Physiology portion of your article, I suggest finding a bit more background information. What I found helpful when researching the physiology and growing conditions is to see the methods sections in specific experiments done with the fungal species, where it lists the optimal conditions the species were grown under. Also in generalized books about the order or class of the fungus, there tend to be some information about a number of different species listed. For the books I suggest the list of books Professor Scott provided on the wikieducation site.
- The Reproduction section within the article seems to have a little bit of an overlap with your Growth and Morphology section, so I suggest that you make it a subheading under that section or place it right after that section to create better flow within your article.
- Finally for the Habitat and ecology section, I think it has a good start where you state all the countries around the world where it can be found. However, I suggest the rest can be organized in a way where the general places the species is found(stated in the outline: common habitat is soil, dung, water, and vegetation) is stated first to provide an introduction. Then you can list all the different, more specific locations like the nose effluent of a cow and mummified honey bear can be listed afterwards.
- After briefly researching about your species it seems like a lot of research about the hormone synthesis during the species sexual reproduction has been a popular topic, so it may be interesting to add a new subheading under Reproduction section. Here are some suggestions of sources you might be able to use for furthering your research:
- https://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/BF00428363
- http://mic.microbiologyresearch.org/content/journal/micro/10.1099/00221287-80-1-111
- http://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/10.1111/j.1469-8137.1968.tb06397.x/full
Hopefully some of my suggestions were of help. Good luck! --Kim.glor (talk) 00:47, 28 October 2017 (UTC)