User talk:Harecai/Triumph of Bacchus (Wautier)
Peer Review
[edit]You’ve added so much! Great work. Here are some suggestions:
- Cite the end of each sentence, and try to get more than one source per sentence.
- Use more sources, and use them more frequently! Try to have your sources spread throughout rather than condensed to a single section.
- Some phrasing should be more objective, for example, remove these phrases from your paragraph on Bacchus: “Perhaps most notably” and “perhaps the more evident of the two”
- This sentence needs some clarity. “There has been some degree of confusion regarding Michaelina Wautier's name and the works it is attached to.” Especially as it is an introduction to the attribution section.
- Change “Background” to “Historical Context,” I thought it was talking about the background of the painting.
- I would elaborate more on how a woman artist made this painting with her social constraints, I didn’t realize she was a woman until the nudity section. MadelineMadrid (talk) 15:09, 8 April 2023 (UTC)