User talk:Hannahfitsum
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[edit]Hello, Hannahfitsum, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:02, 12 February 2020 (UTC)
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[edit]Hi, I have some notes for you:
This reads more like a reflective/argumentative essay than a neutral article. It makes subjective statements like making a judgement call on the effectiveness of protests and also seems to make generalized statements about protests as well. This would pose an issue in the general article about protests, but especially so in an article that is meant to be more specifically about the Google walkouts. It also looks to draw conclusions that aren't or may not be explicitly stated in the source material - keep in mind that we can only summarize what has been explicitly stated in the source material.
I would recommend looking at other, similar articles on protests to see how they're written and formatted. A general example of what layout could be used is this:
- Lead
- Background
- Walkout
- Reactions
- Impact and outcome
This isn't something that we strictly have to follow at the exclusion of other sections, but it's the basic formula of what should be in the article since it would give the basic information of the events leading up to the protest, information about the walkout on the day of, reactions (from the media, Google home office, and/or other notable reactions such as whether or not the people were fired or faced other retaliation for their participation), and then finally, a section that discusses what the ultimate impact and outcome was, if any. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:03, 6 March 2020 (UTC)