User talk:Hannahdelancey/sandbox

Hi Hannah- This is a really good draft. Each paragraph elaborates on different but related points and the overall article is broken up into coherent sections. Also, good use of citations and linking to other wiki pages.

You might want to consider breaking up the second section Asian or Pacific Islander because the first two paragraphs seem to have a slant towards historical context and the other paragraphs focus on the scholarship/academic side.

Overall, the article gives some very important information and background to your topic and would be helpful to anyone who is learning about the histories and nuances of terminology like APA or API while also challenging conventions that homogenize/categorize people based on colonial agendas. RacMell (talk) 20:25, 7 October 2018 (UTC) Rachael < User:RacMell

Sara's Peer Review

Hi Hannah I think your article has a lot if good information. I noticed that there is already an article for Asian Pacific American but it is very brief so I assuming you are editing it. I like how your article goes into greater detail and explains some history of how Americans with ancestry in Asia were addressed prior to the term. I also think you have a lot of reliable sources, you can tell you did your research and you cited very well. You have a lot of references so that could have been easy to mess up but you did a great job! The only improvement I can think of is maybe breaking up your writing into some smaller sections(History of the term, Controversy of term in Academia)or whatever headings you like. I am thinking it may be easier for the reader. Good Job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Safields (talk • contribs) 21:30, 12 October 2018 (UTC)