User talk:Hannahbird96/The Guitar Player (Vermeer)

Hannah's Peer Review

Hey, Hannah! I'd like to say, first of all, that it looks like you're headed in the right direction with your editing. Although I can't really say much about "balanced coverage" and "reliable sources" on your review, given that there isn't much added to your sandbox regarding content yet, here's what I can tell you moving forward:

There is, so far, a neutral tone in your content, which is something that you want to keep, in order to keep the article objective.
You're off to a good start with the lead section, though I think it could be a good idea to bring back up the fact that the painting "traveled" between the Kenwood House and the National Gallery in London due to renovations; as well as the sentence mentioning the period copy,

REDIRECT A Lady Playing the Guitar. According to our Wiki trainings, the lead section is meant to be a summary of the most important information of the article (née highlights), giving the reader a concise idea of what the article covers, - and I think that those pieces of information I just mentioned fit under that category, which I'm sure that you'll be able to embody as you expand on your editing.

Regarding the structure, you seem to have a good idea to where you're heading, but I would suggest, maybe, rephrasing the headings "Composition and style" and "Current incidents", once you're close to being done with the editing process, with something more fitting (i.e. Change "current incidents" to something like "occurrences"?); I, also, believe that it could be a good option to change "materials", "subject matter", "visual analysis" and "musical reference" into sub-headings under the composition section, - as all of these fall under composition analysis. Always keep in mind, as you're editing, to always check sentence structuring and grammar, as this makes it easier for the reader to understand the information given to them, - after all, Wikipedia is supposed to be a searching tool about things you're unfamiliar with. :)
It would be interesting if you'd be able to add the original translation/title of the painting in the pictorial identification box, located on the upper-right corner of your article. I believe it would be Dutch language?

If you're unsure about how to expand your content and sections, I would suggest looking up more complete articles to give you an idea of what else to explore. Look up

REDIRECT Salvator Mundi (Leonardo) by Leonardo da Vinci, #REDIRECT The Scream by Edvard Munch, and #REDIRECT The Milkmaid (Vermeer) by Jans Vermeer as inspiration regarding art historical articles. You could also look up one of the most edited/searched article examples that Ms. Miller showed us in class (i.e.
REDIRECT Britney Spears) for a broader generalization of what might make a good Wikipedia article. Good luck! :) Bckyfern (talk) 11:21, 4 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]