User talk:Hallehoward/sandbox

Hi Halle, The lead section that you added to this article is very good. It gives a broad overview of Palm Beach without getting too specific. However, I would perhaps think about putting the information about the beaches and other tourist destinations before the information about the hotels. Doing this may help the lead section to reflect the most important information in the article. Also, while the information you use is neutral, it may be beneficial to find one more scholarly source to balance out the Trip Advisor and Aruba.com sources. These sources are helpful but their information may not be as neutral as the information from scholarly texts, especially in the History section. Overall, I really enjoyed reading your article. I think it does a good job explaining the history of Palm Beach from a neutral point of view. I hope these suggestions help!

Kwaddick (talk) 23:32, 13 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you so much! You make great points , I will totally revise the overview. I think revising this section will help the flow of the article. I also agree that it is a great idea to get another more scholarly source in the history section as a way of verifying the information almost, as well as adding more! Overall you were very helpful and I agree with all of what you said! Thank you again!Hallehoward (talk) 17:11, 18 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]