User talk:HaiyuanSun/sandbox

Nice, but I would add some history on the uses of cell banks to give the reader better background

Peer Review Comments: Intro: I think the intro is great! Concise but lots of info. Storage: I think this section needs more citations. You state alot of facts and the paragraph could benefit from more sources. Additionally, at the end of the paragraph where you say that cryogenic freezing stores cells "for an extended amount of time" I would try to find a stat about how long it lasts just to fully round out all the information in this section. Freezing: I think the info in this section is great! You said you'll add the sources for everything in this section, which was my only real issue with it. Instead of saying "an issue with DMSO" you could say something more objectively generic like "An observed challenge with using DMSO" or something like that. Thawing: no real changes made Ernst.ch (talk) 02:33, 27 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review - Trevor Holbrook

From a formatting point of view, I think your lead section shouldn't have a header - that way it will appear above the content box. And then all of your subsection headers can be made bigger. I really liked your lead section. I think it does a great job of explaining the subject and providing an overview of its importance. I think a little more content about its purpose could useful, like what major discoveries it has facilitated. Looks like you just need to properly cite your sources, and then this will be a very well-written Wikipedia article. Holbrook.t (talk) 19:43, 25 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]