User talk:Gwils29/sandbox
Gwils29 First Paragraph: • Very vague and needs more detail • Go into more detail of what they do to provide cultural and educational programs and activites,etc… • What happens at Pride? • What happened during the Stonewall riots? • What was the process of getting Atlanta Pride started? What did they have to do from the LGBT movement o eventually form this? • The sentence “The primary purpose of Atlanta Pride is to provide lesbians, gay men, bisexuals, and transgenders, and queer persons with a encouraging environment of awareness.” Delete the ‘and’ in between Bisexuals and transgender. Add a comma instead and put an ‘S’ at the end of transgender.
Second Paragraph: • Why was the first march not broadcasted? • What happened at the first march? • By having the second march televised what kind of changes did that bring to society or make people realize-find a citation for this • In 1973 why were they wearing the bags? Needs more detail of what danger was it to be protesting? What was happening to protesters? • Why did the parade grow to be so big in 2001? What changes were there in history that made this happen? • Maybe talk more about what happens now at pride? The last date for 2015 is random and if you want to keep it then maybe talk more about the experience of it. Jtrah34 (talk) 14:41, 27 October 2015 (UTC)
Hey, good start! I e-mailed your comments to Prof. Lair, so you should have them soon.
April ahmed (talk) 14:47, 27 October 2015 (UTC)
Move to Mainspace
[edit]Gwils29 - did you move your stuff to the mainspace at any point? Please let me know if you have. If not, move your work (copy and paste) to the mainspace - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Atlanta_Pride --- and let me know when you have.
Transunicorn (talk) 23:06, 28 November 2015 (UTC)
)Hey, sorry I thought I been moved it but I guess I didn't. But I did.