User talk:Ghmcinnes/sandbox

Hi Gwennie!

I think it is interesting what you want to add to your article but I cannot comment on much since you have not started writing or adding things to the sandbox yet. I might just not know where you have started writing so I am leaving my comment here. Let me know if you have written somewhere else! Good luck on your article and I will be back to review it later. :) Delvine101 (talk) 00:21, 15 October 2016 (UTC)

Hey there! I also would totally love to comment on your article, but there's not a ton that I am seeing so far on your sandbox. Have you been maybe adding your edits to the main article already? Regardless, I'm looking forward to seeing what you add to the page! RCLU12 (talk) 20:37, 15 October 2016 (UTC)

Hey! So I read what you have written so far and I like your contributions. I think the lead in sentences you have added help with transitions for the reader. I would try to go a little more into detail about what you are talking about. You wrote "hooking up generally refers to having sex...[it could] refer to something less than intercourse." Can you give examples and talk about some of these things? It will also help fill out the page a little more and also help you find more sources! Keep up the hard work!Delvine101 (talk) 03:58, 28 October 2016 (UTC)