User talk:Gabrielramon43/sandbox
Emma Dart's Peer Review
[edit]Water Technology section Second sentence little awkward, Third sentence “One particular environmental issue that this…” simple grammar mistake. Combine third sentence with fourth? Really good start for the Water Technology section, still a little awkwardly worded but has good information, the one thing I would suggest for this section is to incorporate you sources with the paragraph and maybe include a visual.
Background section Sentence five grammar “Due to the different wind zones, two-thirds of Mexico is considered to be arid too semi-arid as they only receive about 500 mm of rain year round. The other third of the country is categorized as humid and varies greatly…” The Background section seems well thought out, just some grammar and rewording seems necessary
Droughts section Sentence one grammar “droughts are one of….” Sentence three and four grammar “that many people…” “Droughts are very common throughout North America and have 5 levels of intensity.” Last Sentence grammar “forthierth”? For the Droughts section maybe go a little more into detail on the scientific reasons why droughts occur, over all good info, fix grammar and wording
It looks like you have good outline for the Groundwater and Water Laws and Regulation sections, looks like all you have to do is go into detail and add sources
Organizations/Programs sections is very well put together! Really enjoyed this section, continue to add detail with the rest of the section you have outlined. I think that here would also be a good space to had another photo or visual in the article.
Overall really good first draft! Easy to follow and a good order for your topics. My advice would be to continue to add detail within all of the sections as well as adding photos or visuals. There are also simple things such as grammar and wording to be fixed, and then just add in sources within the article. Great Job!
Elias Burlison's Peer Review
[edit]Overall, your ideas seem very well put together, with the exception of your section on droughts, as it seems like it ends abruptly. I'm not sure if you still have more to add there, but from a reader's perspective it seems like more could be said. Aside from that, it was very good! Mr.nosilrub (talk) 03:30, 28 March 2019 (UTC)
Instructor Feedback
[edit]You've contributed quite a bit to this page and in different sections, which is great! I have a few suggestions:
1. Change "Water Technology" to "Decentralized Water Treatment Technology" so that others may add centralized treatment and sanitation if they see fit.
2. Move PROME up since it's a government program.
3. Add Cantaro Azul to Organizations. Another one is here if you wish to add more: https://caminosdeagua.org/
4. You need to provide links to other wikipedia articles on the topics you cover, e.g. Mexico–United States border. Do the training on linking and go through all your text to provide links.
--Julianfulton (talk) 20:13, 19 April 2019 (UTC)