User talk:FeebleEagle/sandbox

Peer Review

Treatment and Virus sections could be expanded. The detailed information of virus, such as size, form and infection mechanism, would be helpful. Jack1104ch (talk) 18:43, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The introduction needs more material. I would suggest adding more material about the virus and its mechanism in the virus section in addition to the experimented treatments for the virus. While I personally found no picture in Wikimedia on the virus it would be greatly useful to the audience to have a visual illustration of how the virus itself or the tumors look like. If no additional treatments were found I suggest adding a section called “course of illness” as a replacement of “Treatment” section. In case of references, the ref1 issue number is not bold in contrast of other referencesPorpochista (talk) 18:54, 25 March 2016 (UTC)Porpochista[reply]

I understand from FeebleEagle that there aren't a lot of information about the Yaba Monkey Tumor Virus out there at the moment. Perhaps for the Epidemiology and History section, the editor could look at similar viruses and maybe talk about some similarities (if there are any, hopefully). I would say the same for treatment, if its possible to find similar viruses and if there are known treatments about these viruses, the author could find a way to build on these points.BiochemistrymafiaX (talk) 18:55, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I wonder if the two info box could be merged into one. I feel the figure should be put on the right side of the paper so that all the sections could be lined up on the left of the page. The 1st paragraph could be rearranged in order to provide the information in a more orderly way. Jack1104ch (talk) 18:39, 1 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]