User talk:Eround1/FirstDraft
Evan, I can honestly say that your wiki page is very thorough and impressive. All your links are provides and all your sources are cited correctly. Your page is very organized and the original figure is very clear. However, I feel that the page seems to be a little higher than an average high school reading level. I noticed that you linked some terminology, which helps the reader a lot. However, there still seems to be some information that the reader could not grasp if they had no background on geology like our class does. Overall, the page is very impressive and you seem to be on top of things. - Oliver Navo
I really liked your first draft. It's very comprehensive aside from some specific terms such as "stick-slip and creep processes". Your topic is divided into logical sections and I feel like it is an easy progression of information to follow for a first time reader. Your figures are also very good and go along with the material. But, perhaps in your second figure you can explain what the red dot is in the figure description so people can find out just by glancing at it. Something else that might be cool, but maybe not necessary, is if you had figures showing the different types of boundaries that you describe. You have a lot of references that you used as well. Over all though, I think that this is definitely going to be a solid page. Ericorphys73 (talk) 04:47, 22 October 2012 (UTC)Eric Orphys — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ericorphys73 (talk • contribs) 03:59, 22 October 2012 (UTC)
I believe that you have done a great job on your first draft. The article covers many of the important factors of your topic and is very well organized. Your information has plenty of references and links in order to help the average reader understand the subject. The figure is well done but I don't think it is that important to the subject and I noticed a few spelling and grammatical mistakes. I also think that you could go into a little more detail about the fluid flow component that is breifly mentioned to exist in theses types of earthquakes. - David Pipkin