User talk:Erin.nishimura/sandbox

Peer Review: (Sooji Hong)

Erin's writing is:

  -easy to understand
  -has a neutral content
  -has reliable sources

What Erin can improve on:

  -A clear structure: Because her page is fairly short, there is no clear "structure" (i.e. sensible order or chronology of Donald A. McQuarrie). It would help to include some more information on McQuarrie so that the reader can have a better idea of the author.
  -Grammatical error: The last sentence should be written in present tense "is" instead of "was" and "holds" instead of "held" or change to "has a". (McQuarrie's wife, Carole, is also a chemist has a Ph.D in biochemistry.)

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