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@Engelde: Nice work on your draft. A few basic things first

You need to copyedit your work. You have a lot of cases where there's no space before the start of a sentence, or missing spaces between words. I fixed a few, but you need to go through it carefully.
Only capitalize the first word of section headers. So rather than "Time-Compensated..." use "Time-compensated". Also "Columbus hypothesis" not "Columbus Hypothesis" (this is in the text, not the header).
You could probably add more links to other articles.
The final quote is too long. Try to restrict quotes to less than a sentence.