User talk:Emitz731/new sandbox

I think this article does a good job of staying impartial to the events in which the Emily is having to write about. This neutrality is definitely necessary as Norma Stafford has experienced a lot of things that could elicit certain viewpoints and responses from people, well done. I also really liked the simplicity of the selected works section. I am doing a similar thing with the discography of Starrah and I really liked how simple this layout is versus the complex format that I chose to work with. I also though there was a nice balance of content between the three major areas of information that are currently available on this page. Everything also looks aesthetically pleasing and flows nicely when reading from top to bottom. In addition, the sourcing is also well done. This is something that I did not do a particularly good job on and definitely need to improve on my own page but Emily did this wonderfully and almost every major informational point had good sources following it. Some slight changes that I would recommend making, as the entire page is rather excellent, would be to beef up the lead paragraph just a little bit. I think that it is already a good summary of this individual but it also sounds like a conclusion of sorts in my head when I read it. This isn't an issue whatsoever, I just think the reader would benefit from maybe a sentence or two more of information in this particular spot. As far as the most important improvement that you can make, I think this also qualifies simply because the rest of the article is so well put together I think it would only benefit if you beefed up the lead just a little bit. I am going to take your simplistic layout and format of the selected works page and incorporate that into my working discography page for Starrah, I definitely think it will benefit my article. Semeranoa1 (talk) 13:39, 6 April 2021 (UTC) Anthony Semerano