User talk:Emgamez20/sandbox

For this Article on Florence Bird, I plan to add how she was a writer for the Ottawa Journal and wrote articles concerning women's rights. Bird also broadcasted, with Canadian Broadcasting Corporation, on the exploitation of women in the work force. She brought up arguments of wage equality and emphasized women's needs. Bird argued that women would use the income to contribute to their families and societies. For this article, her contribution to Canada should be added more, as well as how she used her platform of media to reveal the differences between men and women.

Emgamez20 (talk) 02:16, 25 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review

This page is a good starting point to add more the Florence Bird page. The tone is completely neutral. I would recommend that you give more information about Bird’s early life, her career at the in journalism, and her contributions to feminism in Canada. I would also recommend find more sources on Bird. J.J.Angulo (talk) 16:41, 4 April 2017 (UTC)J.J. Angulo[reply]

Emgamez20 (talk) 02:16, 25 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Kacy's critiques for Emily's Sandbox: - make sure to give a header for the topic of each paragraph, especially the lead, just so readers have a main idea of what the section is about

-a few grammatical errors but those can be easily fixed

-good job staying neutral in your tone

-You didn't cite any sources which is a very important part of making a wikipedia article so make sure you go back and add those in (in text)

-more sources — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kmuthiora20 (talk • contribs) 18:42, 4 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]