User talk:ElgeStevens/sandbox
Rough Draft of Flint Water Crisis
Location: The location of my added information will be in the subcategory of "Studies". The information that I will add will be directly under "Virginia Tech Water study". The information may be moved in between "Hurley Medical Center study" and "Virginia Tech Water Study" so the information may be in a more chronological order.
Title: The title of my entry will be called "West Virginia study". My reasoning behind this title is so that the title will continue to correlate with the latter.
Ten Main Points:
The timing of when Flint changed its water source causing lead exposure Neuropsychological Effects of Lead Exposure Varying Fertility and Birth Outcomes The effect of young children being exposed to lead rich water Environmental Injustice Racial Injustice Neglected Flint residents EPA Similar situation in District of Columbia 10 years ago Increase in fetal deaths
Rough Passage On August 7, 2017, West Virginia University published a study validating the correlation between the intake of lead contaminated water and the increase of fetal deaths along with miscarriages during November 2013 to March 2015. The study was led jointly by Daniel Grossman of West Virginia and David Slusky of Kansas University. The data was constructed over the course of two years focusing on the city of Flint and how the data differs among neighboring cites in Michigan. Data shows that after the city switched the water source to Flint's own river, fetal deaths rose 58% among women aged 15-49 compared to control areas. In late December 2014, the city of Flint received an EPA violation for having trihalomethane (TTHM) in the water. The same month, General Motors announced that they would no longer use Flint River due to having corrosive affects on engine parts. However, the Flint river would still be used for human consumption. A key issue is how the city of Flint ignored that humans were consuming water but GM switched water sources to maintain their product. Even though the government of Flint were aware of the dangers of the contaminated water, residents remained ignorant to the potential health affects.
−More information will be added as well as the fixing of grammar.
Works Cited
Campbell, C.; Greenberg, R.; Mankikar, D.; Ross, R.D. A Case Study of Environmental Injustice: The Failure in Flint. Int. J. Environ. Res. Public Health 2016, 13, 951.
Holodny, Elena. “Fetal deaths rose 58% after Flint switched to lead-Poisoned water.” Business Insider, Business Insider, 22 Sept. 2017, www.businessinsider.com/flint-water-crisis-fertility-rates-2017-9.
Ingraham, Christopher. “Flint’s lead-Poisoned water had a ‘horrifyingly large’ effect on fetal deaths, study finds.” The Washington Post, WP Company, 21 Sept. 2017, www.washingtonpost.com/news/wonk/wp/2017/09/21/flints-lead-poisoned-water-had-a-horrifyingly-large-effect-on-fetal-deaths-study-finds/.
Grossman, Daniel, and David Slusky. “The Effect of an Increase in Lead in the Water System on Fertility and Birth Outcomes: The Case of Flint, Michigan.” Working Paper Series, no. 17, ser. 25, 7 Aug. 2017, pp. 1–64. 25.
Mona Hanna-Attisha, Jenny LaChance, Richard Casey Sadler, Allison Champney Schnepp, “Elevated Blood Lead Levels in Children Associated With the Flint Drinking Water Crisis: A Spatial Analysis of Risk and Public Health Response”, American Journal of Public Health 106, no. 2 (February 1, 2016): pp. 283-290.ElgeStevens (talk) 03:57, 27 October 2017 (UTC)
Kennedy C, Yard E, Dignam T, et al. Blood Lead Levels Among Children Aged <6 Years — Flint, Michigan, 2013–2016. MMWR Morb Mortal Wkly Rep 2016;65.
Nia Dokes Peer Review
[edit]Hey, Elge I appreciate the fact that you are talking about the Flint Water Crisis I feel that this topic is an amazing to discuss. The points made within your article are good and no grammar or spelling errors. The only thing that I would say to fix would be to cite your sources in terms of where you retrieved your data from. Nia Dokes (talk) 01:14, 2 November 2017 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]This was a great read and the flow was very nice. There was an amazing use of statistics without over loading the whole paragraph. The only suggestions I have is that you cite your sources in the correct format, such as the ones that when you click it go to the specific information (but that may not be a requirement for the end assignment). Also, I do not think you should start your sentence with "However,". I don't think that is a full sentence, but overall impeccable work.Teresachiyannebeamon (talk) 02:12, 4 November 2017 (UTC)