User talk:Ekrud5/sandbox

Review

I sent this to you by email, but here's a copy.

Here's what you need to fix:

• remove the store list, is inappopriate for an encyclopedia. You can list the total number of stores, using sources like https://books.google.pl/books?id=nhlsDQAAQBAJ&lpg=PT15&dq=%22line%20friends%22%20korea&pg=PT14#v=onepage&q=%22line%20friends%22%20korea&f=false

• you cannot copy content from other pages, except as short quotations, Your first paragraph is copied form the Internet. You have to write the lead (abstract) yourself. Btw it is also has incorrect grammar: it doesn't matter it is official, it just shows that whoever wrote it does not know English (the sentence 'Fun LINE FRIENDS characters with friendly and common look available in daily life beyond its creation background of mobile' is gibberish)

• history section needs more references. Only the last paragraph is referenes

• good section explains origin of Line friends as stickers. This should be merged with history. And is sticker the correct word? You may be looking for the word 'emoji'. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Emoji

• good section should be brief and sourced with newspapers and better sources, not with commercial store pages

• you need to expand more on the cultural and economic significance. Don't describe the products, describe their importance to the society --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 21:40, 20 December 2017 (UTC)