User talk:Ehatcher/sandbox
Emily! Overall, I would say this is a very well written draft. My suggestion is that perhaps you can be more specific on what kind of research Davis conducted in order to find that three times more men than women appear on children’s television shows. You could also cite some more quantitative data to back that claim up, if possible. I also think it would be helpful and interesting to include examples of the top 100 grossing films of 2014 and 2015. Maybe even provide specific examples of the films in which men receive a predominate amount of screen time. I also think there is significance in including more direct quotations in your article. For example, maybe you can find criticism from a respected film critic in regards to men being over-represented in film. Nice first draft! -Sara Fikse Thesaramarie (talk) 02:37, 31 March 2017 (UTC)
Hi Emily! I think you did a really great job with citing sources and staying neutral. One thing that confused me is that it wasn't clear to me what headings all of your sections went under. The original article definitely needs a longer lead, and I wasn't sure whether any of the sections that you wrote were additions to the lead or separate sections, since you didn't label them. Though you do a great job of citing all of your information, many of your sources appear to online magazine articles. Perhaps look to see whether you can find any scholarly journal articles on this subject (though it's possible they don't exist). I think you should also probably cite the last sentence of what you wrote since it reads somewhat like your own opinion without a citation. It appears that most of what you've written is history about the institute, so perhaps expand more into different information that you can provide about the institute. Overall, great job! Elinafelt (talk) 21:33, 30 March 2017 (UTC)
For my contribution to my article, I plan on adding more information about the anti-pornography movement, their beliefs, their founders, and their role in the sex wars. These articles all provide very valuable and reliable information that I plan on incorporating into my article.
Dworkin, Andrea, and Catharine A. MacKinnon. Pornography & Civil Rights: A New Day for Women’s Equality, Catharine A. MacKinnon and Andrea Dworkin, 1988.
Catharine MacKinnon and Andrea Dworkin were radical feminists who kick-started the anti-pornography movement. While they wrote many texts expressing their views on the issue, this is a prominent one that I will rely on in my article. Basically, this publication includes the principles of their beliefs, which include that “women’s human rights are violated through sexual exploitation and abuse. Rape, battery, incest, prostitution, sexualized torture, and sexualized murder express contempt for the human worth of women and keep women second-class” (16). However, it also includes the Ordinance they proposed to the government about pornography and the rights of women and various other minority groups. There is also a running narrative that compares the Civil Rights and Women’s Rights movements in their quest for equality. I plan to use this source to add background information to my article.
McBride, Andrew. “The Sex Wars, 1970s to 1980s.” Out History, 2008, www.outhistory.org/exhibits/show/lesbians-20th-century/sex-wars. This is a very important article that I will use to provide a background on the roles pornography and the views surrounding pornography played in the Sex Wars of 1970-1980, as well as detailing some of the movement’s major players. This article outlines the backbone of the anti-pornography aspect of the Sex Wars, which will be important to add to my article. Moreover, the article discusses the organization behind the anti-pornography movement, which was called Women Against Violence in Pornography and Media, or WAVPM. WAVPM was mentioned briefly in the Wikipedia article, but the information in the McBride article will allow me to add more information about the organization, what they stood for, and the anti-pornography movement as a whole.
Shrage, Laurie. “Feminist Perspectives on Sex Markets.” The Stanford Encyclopedia of Philosophy, edited by Edward N. Zalta, Stanford University, Fall 2016. While this is a very long article, it provides a lot of information that is missing from the Wikipedia article in regards to Feminist criticism of sexual exploitation and the sex industry. This article details why feminists focus on pornography and how pornography can work to objectify women, as well as if sex markets and prostitution should be prohibited. This article proposes that the widespread production and consumption of pornography was a direct result of the ideals of 2nd Wave Feminism and men attempting to contain women to their “rightful sphere.” Essentially, pornography was another means to oppress women.