User talk:Earleyc
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:59, 12 February 2020 (UTC)
Prof. Smith comments on first draft of Wikipedia article
[edit]The second sentence under Convention Proceedings is an incomplete sentence fragment, so be sure to change it: "While that resolution was eventually, after some debate, withdrawn on the grounds that the attendees of the convention lacked the political power make that change."
Also under Convention Proceedings, could you elaborate on this point in the third sentence and name some additional issues that the delegates addressed?: "Most other resolutions made at the meeting fall along those same lines..."
Under Final Address, change the entire paragraph to past tense. Instead of "he argues," write "he argued" and so on, fixing the entire paragraph.
If you want to keep your Bibliography, you can change the title of that section to "Further Reading" to conform to Wikipedia style.
Make sure you include a section of "External Links" (and please do link to the Colored Conventions Project in that list so we can acknowledge that partnership). You also need a See Also section, with links to other Wikipedia articles that are not already linked in the body of the article. The "External Links" and "See Also" sections are requirements for the article. See the template I handed out in class and that is on Canvas under the assignment.
Finally, were African American women involved in the convention at all? Our partner website, the Colored Conventions Project, really wants us to add material on women whenever possible.StaceySmithOSU (talk) 23:22, 14 March 2020 (UTC)
Laiacona feedback for peer review
[edit]Hey Chris,
Lead: I thought you had a very strong lead. I honestly don't have much to advise on. I thought you provided adequate information on the meetings time, location and general meeting details without elaborating too far.
Structure: I thought the two headings you chose structured you page well. I liked how you finished with final address. Its fighting you conclude your article with the conclusion of the convention.
Coverage: You maintain a neutral stance throughout your page. I think you could add more to the convention proceedings section. You can find my suggestions below.
Sources: First off, nice find with your newspaper article. The rest of your sources seem great.
Writing Suggestions: I would suggest adding in what some of the other resolutions made at the convention were exactly to add more context. You could also discuss some of the committees that formed at the convention.
Laiacond (talk) 23:30, 13 March 2020 (UTC)
Reaukauf feedback for peer review
[edit]Hello Chris!
How could your peer improve the lead? - Your lead is very well written! It is covers the who, what, where, and why of your convention very well. I don't think I would add anything to your lead.
Is the overall article structure clear? - Your structure is very clear and organized chronologically, which is helpful and makes sense. I would make your title larger in text size than your headings because they are currently all the same size.
Is there balanced coverage of the topic? Is the tone neutral? - I think you cover the overall topic very well and your tone is neutral. I don't have any recommendations for you for this. You did great!
Are the sources reliable? - All your sources seems very reliable. I see a newspaper article, some books, and scholarly articles. There is also a blog but it seems to go with the topic well.
What proofreading or writing suggestions do you have to improve the article? - There are a few commas you could add, so I would just read over your article to double check for mistakes. Otherwise, your article is clear and written well!
What other things would you add or fix in the article? - I would add some external links and a "See Also" section. Maybe get rid of the bibliography section? I'm not mad about it though and it looks nice, so it's whatever you want to do. Great job overall!Addiedaye (talk) 05:01, 14 March 2020 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by StaceySmithOSU (talk • contribs)