User talk:Draperdavid/sandbox

Peer Review

If the term "Instant Personalization" is capitalized fully in one place I think it should be in all places it is used.
Include sources, especially where there are inserted quotes.
Keep a consistent tense within your writing (past tense, etc.).

Crvazqu (talk) 03:40, 30 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I'm editing your article draft! I think that overall it looks great. You've gathered information on two issues that were not previously included in the article (widening exposure of member information and data mining) which I think are relevant and beneficial to the article. Maybe add a little bit about what the "like" button on social media means so that people who aren't on social media platforms understand. I really liked that you included an example of how information that was supposed to be private ended up being public because this really helps exemplify how prevalent the issue is. As for the second part where you discuss data mining, it may be beneficial to give a little more background about data mining and what it is and how it has been problematic in the past (not a lot just a little to help the reader follow the rest) Great work!!!! :) Emilymorse22 (talk) 16:35, 27 March 2017 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jmstew2 (talk • contribs) [reply]