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@DrakeS, Emmett121, and JaminB: Nice work on your draft.

You rely rather heavily on an article from 2003. The preference is for sources that are no more than five years old - this one is 15. A lot can change in how we understand the brain and treat disease since the early 2000s. You need to rely on more recent sources
Your last two references aren't real references - they're search results from a subscription-only database. You need to use properly-formatted references, which you can create using DOIs and the cite tool.
References go ~~before~~ after punctuation, not before.
Avoid writing in the style of a journal. For example, something like this isn't encyclopedia-like in style, it's written from the perspective of someone who is making these observations.

Some improvement can be seen within a year for those with mild impairments, but can take much longer in those with higher severity damage

Make sure that what you say can be supported by the source you're citing. For example, you wrote

Excessive drinking costs the US approximately $250 billion in 2010^[4] and has been increasing since.

The only reference after this statement in the paragraph is the same ref [4], a source entitled "2010 National and State Costs of Excessive Alcohol Consumption". While it's possible that the source comments on changes since 2010, the abstract doesn't mention post-2010 developments. So double-check that your sources support what's said. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:44, 4 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I think Ian meant references after punctuation. MMBiology (talk) 23:02, 4 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]