User talk:Dimademashkieh
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[edit]Hello, Dimademashkieh, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Adam and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:09, 13 September 2016 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]What does the article (or section) do well? Gives a great overall picture of how meditation is being used in the workplace. You explain the companies that use meditation, studies that show its effectiveness on workers, and how the use of meditation affects the company as a whole. I like how you set it up, it leads the reader from the "what" to the "why."
What changes would you suggest overall? The only thing I noticed is how you cited your sources in the text. I'm under the impression that the citation (the [1],[2], and so on) should follow the period in the sentence that is using the source. It looks like you've cited the source at the beginning of the sentence that uses that information.
What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? I think this is a fantastic add to the meditation article (if that's what you're planning). If you're creating a separate "Meditation in the Workplace" article, I would suggest adding basic background as an introduction to your article. You can probably get a solid amount of information from the sources that the meditation article uses.
Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know! I like how she leads the reader from the "what" to the "why" by starting with meditation at the workplace and which companies have used it, then following it up how it improves employee and company well-being. I think that I could improve my article by structuring it in a way like this because it helps the reader understand why the topic is important.