User talk:Desarayjackson/sandbox

You did great job to organize your article and already put contents that should be appeared.
I think, you repeated the word such as infection or inflammation in same paragraph which makes your article neglected.
The cause section would be great if you may add some source of causes such as which bacteria or virus or organisms are most infectious.
Some histology pictures or images are needed to recognize the disease.

Khulan G (talk) 15:46, 18 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Peer review Belagha (talk) 18:42, 18 November 2020 (UTC)

-Desaray, I think you did a great job adding all of the important subheadings that people would want to learn about this topic. -Something I think you can work on is that you were kind of repetitive with a lot of words like "infection/infectious" -Under the cause for the disease, maybe you can find out which bacteria it is that causes the infection -I think you can rephrase a lot of sentences to make it sound more professional and sophisticated

Belagha (talk) 18:42, 18 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Dr. Weiner's Comments

Avoid filler sentences like the first sentence in signs and symptoms
A picture of the anatomy involved would really help.
If the acute vs chronic falls under diagnosis, connect it to that. If that's not the right place, figure out where is and explain the difference.
If all your treatment info came from the same source, cite at the end. If not, add additional citations.
You discussed prevention information in recent research. I'd like to see that in your prevention and treatment section.
You've done a good job here with something that I know has limited information. I know how hard you have worked finding what little information is out there. You've really pulled together the pieces that there are. I think this could be really helpful.

--76.255.203.210 (talk) 03:29, 21 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

- It is not possible to not use infection and infectious when talking about a disorder that causes an infection. Also there is not much information on this topic to provide all more variety of terms.--Desarayjackson (talk) 02:17, 17 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]