User talk:Ctngirl/Domestication in perennial crops

Article review

The outline of the article is very clear for readers. This seems very useful for basic to advanced readers. Domestication's overview and genetic diversity is clear, but I would suggest to add more variations in the genetic diversity. This might be helpful to show the genetic variation related things during the domestication process. Another important part of the article I liked is domestication process related to sustainable agriculture. This not only provides the advantages of perennial agriculture system, but also provides the glimpses of the ecological benefits of such crops. Statement followed by citations makes the clear understanding, as well as systematic. I would suggest to cut off some content related to perennial grains and add other perennial plant system examples too, as the content seems more focused with grain crops. Overall, I like the format and content of the article. Great job! Karkataceace (talk) 04:06, 25 October 2022 (UTC)

Thanks! This is very important feedback and suggestions. I did cut off with some lines and would try to make broader perennial crops instead of grains. Ctngirl (talk) 04:55, 1 November 2022 (UTC)

Nia's Review

I really liked the way that you organized your article to me it looks very neat and aesthetically pleasing/easy to read through. One thing that I might do is restructure the wording in some of the sentences though. For instance in the second sentence where it says: " As the population will grow, the demand for land, energy will also be factor to hamper the ability of agriculture for production of food to sustain society." I might've worded it differently such as: " As the worlds population continues to grow, the demand for land and energy will increase hampering agriculture and limiting overall food production needed to sustain society." I would go through and read some of the sections out loud to see whether some of them might have sentences with grammatical errors in them as well. I would also add some pictures to some of the sections to act as a visual aid, and give context to what it is that you are trying to express as well. For instance in section one where you talk about sustainable agriculture(using native plants vs industrial low-diversity high-input agriculture) I might add a picture or two showing native fields rich in biodiversity vs ones used for agriculture with low biodiversity in them for example just to give context. Also I think you might need to add some more in-text citations. For instance in the bolded section: Characteristics of perennial grain crops that differ than the annual crops you stated some factual information but didn't add references to where you got the information from in the text. Those are all of the suggestions I had that I think might help. Overall I think that you did a great job! Curlygirl897 (talk) 17:54, 5 November 2022 (UTC)

Thank you for the suggestion. I have worked on the grammatical errors and wording of the sentences that you have mentioned. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ctngirl (talk • contribs) 02:53, 9 December 2022 (UTC)

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Peer review

I think it is a really great start! It has a good structure and thorough detail. I like that you have the characteristics in a numbered list so it is easy for anyone to read. I think what would be good to improve would be to expand upon why the emphasis should be on your "for instance..." statement. Do you also plan to expand upon the 6 characteristics too?

In the third sentence of the "Domestication of perennial crops and sustainable agriculture." I think it should be "There seems 'to be' a necessity..." There is also a typo: "activitiesnin" in the last sentence of that paragraph Ironphd10 (talk) 04:07, 25 October 2022 (UTC)

Thanks! This is very important suggestions for improving the grammatical errors, and also I would focus with example as well as pictures for making more clear. Ctngirl (talk) 04:54, 1 November 2022 (UTC)

Tyler Peer Review

Hello, I think the article provides some good information but can still be improved in some ways. One major improvement I believe could be made would be the section on Research focused in different breeding programs. I believe expanding that section and adding more information would be beneficial and give context on ways domestication of perennial crops can be used in scientific fields. Currently that section is a lot smaller than the others, so I believe it should either be expanded or broken apart and added to other sections. Another major improvement could be the addition of pictures as there are currently none. Some ideas for pictures could be of the perennials mentioned in the draft or the genomic activities mentioned. A small improvement that could be made is in the first sentence of the section on Research focused in different breeding programs. I found the sentence hard to understand and I was unsure what you meant to say. I believe it could be rewritten to be easier to understand. Another small improvement I believe could be made is in the first and second sentences of the overview section. The second sentence was structured in a way that made it difficult to understand what was meant. I think it might be better to phrase it as "More than one-third of land surface has been converted for agricultural purposes, and as the population will grow, the demand for land and energy will be factors that hamper the ability of agriculture to produce food to sustain society". Overall, I think the draft provides some good information and if these changes are made it will be even more informational and easy to understand. Ttbioclass (talk) 05:53, 7 November 2022 (UTC)

I appreciate your suggestions and feedback. I have added pictures and worked on the sentences that you have mentioned.Thank you! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ctngirl (talk • contribs) 02:55, 9 December 2022 (UTC)