User talk:Cpnoll/Earth's outer core
First Peer Review Reflection Paragraph
[edit]Jiinjung's comments and suggestions were excellent! Namely, their concern about how my section would fit with the rest of the Earth's outer core page is perfectly valid, and I'm working now to improve and add to the current Wiki article information. The preexisting article already has constraints on the temperature and size range of the outer core. Thus far, I have yet to find a reliable source constraining the pressure of the outer core, but I will keep looking. In the meantime, I will detail representative light elements in the accretion section and make other general improvements. Since Jiinjung's comments are concise, this paragraph is equally so. Thank you! Cpnoll (talk) 17:06, 27 February 2022 (UTC)
Hi Chris, Very nice wikipedia article with an excellent complete introduction to Earth's outer core and reference coverage. I was very impressed. My comments are as below:
1. The beginning part in which you mentioned ji-in's reviews and you modifications might need to be moved to the talk page before you get it published?
2. Is there any way to differentiate the heading "constrains" with its two subheadings? Now they have the same size and font making me suppose that they are at the same order.
3. As for the language using, I'm not a native speaker so I would be very cautious in giving you suggestions, but you can see some of my comments in the BOLD WORDS in you article now. Most of them are logical related, not grammar suggestions. Please accept or decline based on your judgement as I might be wrong.
4. In the "property" part, you might want to mention the fact that because of the outer core is composed with liquid, it cannot propagate shear seismic waves, leading a S-wave shadow zone. It is also based on this findings scientists first depicted a liquid earth core in 1906. See wikipedia Shadow Zone
Anyway, it is an excellent page. Feel free to contact me if you have further questions.