User talk:Coriordan7/sandbox

Overall: I think your morphology section is done SUPER well. The subsections are easy to read, and concise. Well done! I’m not sure if this is just a bug on my computer, but in the “Contents” section, some of the subsections are bolded while others are not. With the gloss examples, it might be helpful to give meaning to/define the letters on the second row (since not everyone knows what the letters refer to). The phonology and syntax sections seemed to be a bit barren, but that might just be how your grammar describes Domari. I think you do an amazing job making your Wikipedia accessible to every reader, and giving good examples. There’s barely enough to get a good gist as to how your language is structured. One really useful tip the other grammar I peer reviewed did was underlining the important words of each gloss in order to direct the focus of the reader to which words, specifically, the example is portraying.

Lead: Although I think it is awesome that you give credit to Matras, this article feels more like a paper that’s turned in for a report than a Wikepdia page. This is most pronounced in the final paragraph of the lead.

Phonology: Vowels: I really liked how you described what is meant by “high” -> “low” instead of assuming that the reader would be familiar with mouth placements. However, I think the other material in this section are extraneous/redundant because they are shown in the table right below. Consonants: I’d suggest moving the description of the consonants above its table (as it appears for vowels) in order to keep the phonology section consistent. I think someone unfamiliar with the parentheses in the graph may have trouble understanding what they mean, and whether they are phonemic. Syllable Structure: Maybe just add a small tidbit on syllable structure here (like in the consonant and vowel sections, those were done really well!).

Morphology: Affixation: A quick example here could be really powerful :) Verb Derivation: My opinion is that one example is enough, but that’s your choice.

Syntax: Basic Word Order: I like how you point out that transitive clauses are the sentences you focus on in order to discern basic word order. However, as in the “verb derivation” section, my opinion is that one example is sufficient. Your final example was good to keep in order to back up your claim from the “Syntax” lead though! Other Head-Complement Pairs: I liked your first example best :) Ckl17 (talk) 23:31, 13 April 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review by Rachel Lim

Lead: Overall was a good introduction. You gave ample history about the language, while keeping it concise. One thing I wanted to recommend is making a info box recapping important facts (i.e. endangerment level, region, etc.)

Phonology: Includes bare minimum information, and the tables are complete. Three things I wanted to note: first, the acronyms “vl” and “vd” might be better to be spelled out. Second, the first column of each table needs to be turned into a heading. Third, maybe add a sentence or two explaining the syllable structure.

Morphology: Just four small things to note: first, in your affixation section I think you meant to explain circumfixation when you said a prefix and a suffix are used together. Second, I personally wasn’t sure what bilingual suppletion. Does it fit under the morphology section or vocabulary section? Perhaps add a little bit more information on it so the reader can fully understand this concept (also hyperlink it!) Third, I was wondering if there were other morphological processes in the language that could be added for your next draft. Fourth, the stress section had demonstrative examples. Overall, well done!

Syntax: You gave good examples in this section — definitely keep them for the next draft.

Overall: It was overall a strong first draft! It had all the required sections, and they had bare minimum information collected from our class assignments. The writing was also easy to comprehend, organized logically, and to the point. One general to-do item for the next draft would be hyperlinking all the important terms throughout the sections. Hyowonl (talk) 00:02, 14 April 2019 (UTC)