User talk:Cooltopics/sandbox
Feedback: Sentence 6 needs to be reworded/formatted
Too many long and wordy sentnces
Jumps around a lot; could probably be made into more precise and one topic paragraphs
The lead is well stated to show what the rest of the article is about
Need to state the things referring to women's rights from a neutral stand point
The references given seem to reliable and the information from them is presented more, but maybe try to get another source that is more neutral or for the other standpoint
Overall information covers topic well, just needs more structure and a clear and neutral standpoint