User talk:Contehrose
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[edit]Hello, Contehrose, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:33, 10 September 2018 (UTC)
Greisy's Peer Review
[edit]At first glance, I really like your subheadings and citations you added at the end, they allowed me to see the credibility of your sources. I should probably add those too.
You could add in-text citations so I know what's yours and what isn't, for example, when you defined horizontal oppression or when you added the research which talked about the ways you can combat sexism, I know I also have to do that.
The first two sentences of your second section (Combating Internalized Sexism) sound like they're contradicting each other: first, you say there hasn't been much research and then you go on to say research suggests these effective ways of combating it.
Overall, I really enjoyed how straightforward and neutral the language was, which is especially great for a WIKI article. I also really enjoyed how well each sentence and section flowed together. :)
(Also, I don't know how to find the article you're drafting this for, which didn't allow me to add comments about your content, specifically regarding what's already out there)