User talk:Conorm33/sandbox

Before you make this live I think you need to think about headings and organizing the information. Your first couple of sentences are a god general description but then I think the rest of the information needs to be under different headings like benefits of alloparenting, alloparenting in humans. Make sure there are enough references and links to other articles.

Peer Comment: I would also make sure to proof read the article before posting it. I noticed a few spelling and grammatical mistakes while reading through, and a few of the sentences were a bit awkwardly structured. — Preceding unsigned comment added by OpalOsprey (talk • contribs) 19:01, 8 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I agree with organizing the information better and checking headings. Also, including an opening introductory paragraph would make reading the article much easier. Under the "Alloparenting in nature" heading, you have a "-" which I don't think is supposed to be there. The article lacks consistency with organization and bullet points. Try and incorporate more hyperlinks to other wiki articles, or outside sources so it decreases confusion to the reader. Overall, the article is good but just needs some work before going live. Verashark (talk) 19:05, 8 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]