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Expansion of Cristiano Amon biography
[edit]Thank you for adding information to the article about Amon I created initially. I am not able to verify some of the references you gave, as I don't have access to some of them.
The part "Personal Life" mentions his hobbies. I would delete this part, as hobbies are normally not mentioned on WP. However, it would be interesting to know, whether Amon is married and has children.
It is preferrable to change/add to the existing text rather than replacing it entirely. In particular, maintain the categories already published.
I wonder whether all the "Notes" are needed.
Once your changes are published, I could make some minor improvements such as adding wikilinks. BBCLCD (talk) 14:35, 9 October 2022 (UTC)
- Have used two additional references to expand this biography. Included some of your draft sentences. BBCLCD (talk) 09:15, 1 November 2022 (UTC)