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Peer Review
[edit]Overall great work!
The biggest consistent area of improvement in this article is sourcing. There are several sentences throughout the article that are not sourced. I think when created an article that is completely new, sourcing and having a lot of references is so important. Working to find more sources or just expanding upon your evidence could really enhance the article. Expanding the background section or even adding a History section explaining how these researchers found out about or collected data about the Atlas, could add a lot to the article. The Linguistic Atlas of Chinese Dialects is a good reference point for seeing what that article does well but also is lacking, and apply it to the creation of your article.
A picture of the atlas/map of this region could aid in giving context to your evidence.
Great job! Nor'bro 123 (talk) 00:44, 15 April 2017 (UTC)
Peer review for ENGW3307
[edit]Review: 4/15/17 by Rmills66
This is a good topic and a very interesting field of work!
Your lead section is very good. It is short and to the point, and it gives the reader a good idea of the coming information in the article. In terms of structure, I think that these section headings are perfect, but you may want to re order them. I think it may be a good idea to have the "Findings" section come earlier in the article because most readers will be looking for this information.
The article obviously needs a bit more research, but I think you have done a good job of streamlining your research so it focuses on satisfying the sections. It would also be really cool to include pictures of the linguistic maps! I've never seen one before and I would imagine many of the readers of this article haven't either. This article will turn out great if you continue writing with a neutral, fact-based style, and include consistent citations throughout the article.
Best, Rmills66 (talk) 20:49, 15 April 2017 (UTC)
Spongebubble94 (talk) 03:45, 17 April 2017 (UTC)== Peer Review ==
First and foremost, this is a very interesting topic and overall I think you did a good job, you just need to do a bit more work.
1. At the beginning of the article you stated "The Linguistic Atlas of New England, edited by Hans Kurath, is a linguistic map describing the dialects of New England."
- I don't believe you need to say "edited by Hans Kurath." However, If you feel this is important information for readers to know, I suggest you make an extensions section where you will make note of that, along with a link/hyperlink to direct readers to his page.
2. "LANE consists of 734 maps"
- If I didn't know any better as a reader, I would be wondering "what is LANE?" you should definitely put "The Linguistic Atlas of New England(LANE)" at the beginning of this article.
3. "Seven New England states were studied: Maine, Vermont, New Hampshire, Massachusetts, Connecticut, Rhode Island and New York"
- You can ask professor Musselman how she feels about this, but if it were my article I would hyperlink these states.... believe it or not, some people don't know what New England is, or what those states are... especially if they are from other countries... Just a suggestion ...
4. "In New York, only Long Island was covered. Some data from Southern New Brunswick, Canada, was also included[1]."
- You should probably re-word these sentences, or reword the whole 2-3 sentences so that it makes more sense... one part of these sentences was a fragment. This should be reworded in a way that the sentences will have more of a flow....
Example: Seven New England states (add states)...., and one country, (add country, add province) was studied. Although NewYork was on of the states studied, the author did not include Long Island.
5."The first volume of LANE also included the Handbook of the Linguistic Geography of New England (1939), by Hans Kurath and Miles L. Hanley.[2]"
- this is another sentence I feel is out of place... I suggest you also adding this to an external link section
6. See if you can find more background on this topic. One sentence in the background is not enough.
- I'm not sure if this link will direct you there, but I found some articles in the Northeastern Library on this topic The Linguistic Atlas of New England
7. You should probably be a bit more descriptive in the methods, and finding sections
8. If you want to tell what was won for this map, maybe you should put it in the intro, or you should put it in background... remember this is about LANE not Kurath
9. This is another thing you can probably ask professor about, but its my suggestion: Maybe instead of making a "Handbook section" you can make note of this handbook and put it in the external link section.
I know this seems like a lot but I promise you, its not. Its just very detailed so I can help you as much as possible. I hope this is enough to help you with your wiki page. GOOD LUCK !! :)