User talk:Clairer744/Triple planetary crisis
Student Editor Introduction and Source Evaluation
[edit]Hello everyone! My name is Claire, and I am an environmental science student at Georgia Tech. I am excited to start editing this article. It seems that so far everything in the article is related to the topic with no distracting aspects. No information currently seems to be out of date, but there are many missing details to be added and many topics to expand on. In addition, pictures or graphics could be added as well. There is not much scientific information present, it is mostly just links to other Wikipedia pages of related topics. I will be adding more information soon, so if you have any suggestions, please reach out.
Thank you.
~~~~ Clairer744 (talk) 17:12, 12 October 2023 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]- Lead Section: Your lead section does a good job on giving a general overview of the triple planetary crisis and what will be talked about in the rest of the article. There are just a couple of things I would fix: 1. Change “A terminology” to “a term” or something along those lines. 2. The first paragraph says “the three intersecting global…” but then four are listed, so maybe clear up which of the four are the three actual parts. 3. I don’t know if GDP needs to be mentioned in the Lead section, it is just supposed to be an overview. 4. Maybe reword “The framework is similar to other multidimensional analysis,” as it might be hard for some readers to understand.
- Structure: I like the structure of your article a lot, especially how you gave each crisis its own section, and then tie them all together at the end with the UN section. It is also beneficial to readers how you listed the sections in order of how they were listed in the lead section, with pollution first, then climate crisis, etc. To add more content while also keeping the sections balanced, you have the option to add a section on future outlook or these problems in relation to government and money.
- Balanced Coverage: All of the sections appear adequately balanced in content, with no one section overpowering the rest. As for content, it could be helpful to add a little more information to the pollution page, such as specifics in the amounts of pollution, whether this is increasing, and why pollution is one of the planetary crises. For all of the topics if you would like to add more information you can add more future outlooks, as in the future of climate change and how biodiversity loss will affect us and the environment in the long run. You can also add what the UN/ Usa or certain countries are doing for these problems, as well as different perspectives on each, such as climate skepticism and different pollution initiatives.
- Neutral Content: All of your content is very neutral and unbiased. It is hard to be unbiased with topics like this because sometimes things like climate change can be politicized but you did a good job of stating facts rather than opinions.
- Sources: The sources section is very full, with more than enough scholarly sources utilized, increasing the reliability of the article. There appears to be no problems with any of the sources, and they are all cited correctly.