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draft comments

Hey Cjumeh11, I'm providing online support for your class at UMD and I had a few comments on your draft:

There appear to be some scholarly sources engaging Okoye's work (e.g. a chapter in this book) which could really improve the article. I haven't done an exhaustive search but there look to be 3-5 articles you could probably get ahold of from your library pretty easily.
Take a look at Janise Yntema for a sense of what an article like this might look like, specifically:
- Wikipedia articles start with a "lead" section which doesn't need a heading. This section is a short summary of everything in the article. For some articles this summary can be a few paragraphs. Others (like Yntema's article and probably this one) can be a few sentences long.
- Sections like "accomplishments" are usually best integrated into prose rather than left as bulleted lists. In some cases (e.g. where there are many awards) a list is fine, but in this case we've got an award for a book and an award for her, so turning that into a paragraph won't be too hard and will likely make the article read a bit better.
Do we know when she was born or other biographical details?
It helps to link certain topics or things in wikipedia articles, for example Anambra State can be wikilinked, allowing the reader to follow that link for some added context.

I'm looking forward to seeing more on this topic. Thanks for your work so far. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:48, 3 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

For other sources, you may want to check out this biography. Additionally, there is commentary about her work in this book and thhis chapter, and WorldCat has a list of additional works.--CaroleHenson (talk) 16:33, 7 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]