User talk:ChristalCao/sandbox

Hello, It's me

Great information, and all of the resources are cited. Maybe you can agg more hyperlink to other pages such as McDonald's and KFC. Koko413 (talk) 23:44, 31 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

It is a great idea and nice citation in your wikipedia passage. Maybe you can add more specific examples to detail your topic.Samuelzhao000005 (talk) 18:26, 31 March 2019 (UTC)Samuelzhao000005[reply]

Pretty good analysis, great use of citations, and the language is neutral as it should be. Are there any other rivalries except McDonald's and KFC?--Jasonkung22 (talk) 21:23, 31 March 2019 (UTC)--Jasonkung22 (talk) 21:23, 31 March 2019 (UTC)Jasonkung22[reply]

Great job so far. Great use of citations and a great overall analysis of the topic. What I would like to suggest is to consider revising the titles as I am unsure (due to lack of bolding and/or structural emphasis) of what "2.3 KFC vs. McDonald's in China" and "2.1.4 KFC’s Success in China" are referring to. Consider using the "text type" drop-down menu. Otherwise, great work! Jaredgoz (talk) 15:56, 3 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

The first citation you put is in an awkward place. It might be better to put it after 'China'. Also for the statement about how many KFC restaurants are added per year in a city needs a citation. Its an interesting fact but I don't know where it came from.SocksOfDeath (talk) 16:01, 3 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Great information and you remain very fact based. Maybe just editing your sentence structure to make it flow better would help. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Wohlina (talk • contribs) 16:05, 3 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This looks really good! The information is very useful and in fact driven. I definitely think the pictures help to strengthen the page and also the way that the information flows from broad to more specific is good! I think you could make the sentences flow a little bit more but overall I think it looks good! Isabelleshegog (talk) 16:15, 3 April 2019 (UTC)Isabelle[reply]

Great Job! You have a lot of well-used data and sources. Overall it seems very well written and unbiased; however, I would remove or add quotations to the word smart in "McDonald's were smart enough that it prefers to open new locations in the areas based on KFC’s expansion" to remain unbiased. Lorenaramirezl (talk) 16:24, 3 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Very good job on your page! I really like your topic and the fact that you have some very unique images for your audience! I suggest that you include some hyperlinks and maybe some headings/subsections to organize your writing. Fariha34 (talk) 16:29, 3 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This a really nice topic and I liked how you're developing your sandbox. You saw that you indicated the subsection that your article will fit in, but you forgot to add a hyperlink of the page you're going to add it. I think that you can narrow down a little of the information in the first paragraph, because while I was reading it sounded repetitive, maybe i'm wrong.Rafamatalon1234 (talk) 01:02, 4 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Very informative article. However just sort out the sources, even though you have used excellent sources for this topic. Charlier118 (talk) 23:50, 5 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Great job! Format your headings so they stand out more. Also, add links when you can! Sydneycurrie5 (talk) 20:38, 7 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]