User talk:Chnava

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:18, 1 September 2021 (UTC) Program of All-Inclusive Care for the Elderly I think that most of the article looks great. It provided a lot of vital information such as the overview of the program, cost, and eligibility, in a concise manner, which made it easy to read through and understand. I just have a few suggestions regarding some of the sections: For the eligibility section I would add an example of someone who is eligible and who is not. It might be unclear to some people what distance from the PACE program is considered "near" and also how they define "safety."[reply]

For the program description: I would include the list of ADL and IADLS, as not everyone knows what they are. People will also have different definitions for what instrumental entails. Also, if people are using this page to make a decision on where to send their loved one, it might be good to include more details on the program. Also, it would be good to include a section as to how this model has been impacted by the pandemic.

You also cited pretty much every sentence so I don't think you lack any citations.Chnava (talk) 07:25, 16 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Growth Chart I think the introduction is very clear and easy to follow. I like how you included the quantitative definitions. I just have a few suggestions regarding the other content. For the section "Common Variants of Normal Growth," I believe the audience would benefit from a table comparing the different kinds of variants. That will make the differences between them more clear, and make it easier to read. For the section "Clinical Significance," I would add more detail on the different disorders, and also possibly create a table. It might even be beneficial to combine both the CVNG and the CS section so that you can directly compare normal and pathologic patterns of growth and their causes. I would also suggest adding more citations, like at the end of this sentence: "A decrease of height velocity with retained or increased weight velocity can be indicative of endocrine disorders including hypothyroidism, growth hormone deficiency, and excess of glucocorticoids."Chnava (talk) 07:47, 16 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]