User talk:Chantellerodis/sandbox

Peer Review

Your opening sentence is fantastic. Refrain from using words such as "however". You should have different sections relating to the years that events have happened. You can have a section on 1922, 1930's, and so forth. You can also have a section on the Chilean Women's Party. You summarized the whole feminist movement in Chile in one paragraph. If you elaborated on certain aspects, your wiki article would be larger with more information.AmyR7 (talk) 02:16, 13 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I think you definitely give a solid background on some of the major parties and women in the Chilean feminist movement, but there isn't a lot of expansion on it. You mention Graciela Mandujano, Marie de la Cruz and Michelle Bachelet, but you don't expand on them much further. If the section is focusing on leaders of the feminist movement it should give more background on them. They probably have a larger role than just finding some of the parties of Chile. It does need expansion like the reviewer above mentioned.Jlombera (talk) 17:52, 15 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]