User talk:Cewilson15/sandbox
You made a good change in the lead from "commonly known as" to "also known as," this change takes away the bias.
You have the introduction listed on your new information, but you do not have a lead on your new article. Does that mean you are leaving the old lead?
Under the "Description" heading, when you are discussing the leaves, instead of saying "the top is dark green and shiny," maybe put "the top of the leaves are dark green and shiny" just to be more specific. The specificity sounds better. Also, under description I would word the description of the fruit as "the fruit is classified as a drupe" and "these fruits are in clusters of 4-8 fruits per cluster."
Under the "Taxonomy" heading you had great descriptions between the two plant species!
Under "Distribution and Habitat" I would word the tolerable passage something like this: The plant is extremely tolerable in drought conditions, making it capable of persisting through the winter months", or the "winter temperatures."
Under "Horticulture" you should put "This is considered" rather than "this is what would be considered," that sounds like you are unsure of yourself. Be confident!
The section "Invasive" may be better titled as "Invasiveness" also, maybe reword it to say: "without fervent pruning it will quickly become overgrown," rather than "unless pruning maintenance is kept up with on this plant it will become overgrown very quickly."
Under "toxicity" could you define what saponines means? Also, it might be best to say that the "gastrointestinal tract will be severely affected" just to keep away awkward wording. Also, you mentioned lip smacking twice for animals. I don't know if that was intentional or not!
Overall it was really well written!
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