User talk:Cecile Flapjack
Allthenope (talk) 19:58, 27 October 2014 (UTC) Hello! This is Allthenope! Can't wait to discuss matters on Feminist Theory. I'm certain you share my views on the matter and on the course, but I can't wait to discuss them!
Peer Review - Stone Butch
[edit]Hello friendmate! I have read your edit history for Stone Butch and I will do my absolute best to assist!
I realize the first sentence to the paragraph was not something you wished for me to review, however, I had a question. Perhaps the sentence could somehow be reworded to disambiguate the meaning? "...adverse to sexual contact with their genitalia." Whose genitalia? Their own, or their partners? I realize the next sentence clarifies somewhat, but I feel that perhaps it should be more obviously stated.
Instead of instead. What about, "For a stone butch, sexual satisfaction is derived through giving sexual pleasure to their partner with little to no interest for reciprocation." I only figured adding sexual pleasure first would at least allude to what the second half of the sentence meant.
Consider replacing "Unlike..." perhaps with; "In comparison to..." or another sentence start. The word "unlike" can be dangerous, as it is easy to overuse and abuse in writing. Overall this sentence is not bad, but it seems to have jumped from one aspect of a stone butch to another. The same for the final, stating about the identification of transgender.
I hope you expand on this topic, or consider it for your project! Great job, and good luck!! ℳ.ℳ. BionicTwinkie (talk) 04:13, 9 November 2014 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]Hi there!
I went through both articles and have a few suggestions for both of them. For the stone butch page, perhaps there's a more eloquent way to say that the stone butch is more dominant sexually than saying, "she's the top" since the top/bottom dichotomy is usually more associated with homosexual men. Other than that, I believe the above peer review hits the nail on the head for what you are looking for.
I think it's a GREAT idea to expand on the second article! Young adult literature containing LGBT themes and relationships are hugely underrepresented, and it's incredibly important that we change that. If you're feeling up to the task, I strongly urge you to go ahead and expand the article to the best of your ability. JG_StoCoNJ (talk) — Preceding undated comment added 02:47, 10 November 2014 (UTC)