User talk:CaptainsComingLookBusy/sandbox

Sample: Here I am talking to myself. CaptainsComingLookBusy (talk) 19:45, 30 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Only losers talk to themselves CaptainsComingLookBusy (talk) 19:47, 30 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Harsh!

Hey team,

This looks really fantastic so far - really great work!

Really, all that this needs is a bit of proofreading (e.g., one of the reference links has an error), and I think it would be a very good article. If you want to go above and beyond, then here are a few thoughts I had:

I think I would put the athletic section together with the buildings - they seem similar enough to be grouped together
It was a little bit confusing as to what buildings were built when - that could be clarified
If someone is feeling really ambitious, this article is begging for a map - maybe showing the area of lakefill that was added in each of the 2 rounds of its creation.

Overall, though, really strong work. You should definitely send a message to Ian to get some additional feedback and pointers, and then post this bad boy on Wikipedia!

-- Jdfoote (talk) 15:36, 24 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]