User talk:CamdenAl/sandbox

Sources

Your sources and citations look great. Go ahead and add the citations to the article. Josef Horáček (talk) 00:01, 21 February 2016 (UTC)

The Lead

Your lead looks good. You should revise all sentences that address the reader as "you" because an encyclopedia entry shouldn't read like a how-to. Rephrase those sentences in the third person. Once you get that done, you can post the lead. Josef Horáček (talk) 10:52, 26 February 2016 (UTC)