User talk:CalUser777

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:46, 23 February 2022 (UTC)

Your draft

Hi. I moved your draft back to your sandbox because the current structure of the article isn't appropriate for a stand-alone Wikipedia article. I strongly recommend that you read pages 7-9 of the Editing Wikipedia brochure, which I have linked to. Some specific issues:

With a lack of a strong, unified central government, Somalian warlords have been able to consolidate power in the form of regional militias. These warlords have been the source of much misery in Somalia. The victims of such misery are overwhelmingly innocent civilians caught in the political and economic turmoil of their country. In response to such devastation, the world has responded in various forms.

• A Wikipedia article is supposed to start with a lead section that summarizes all the major points of the article. It should generally open with something like Article title is... and go on to succinctly say what the topic is in the opening sentence. If you do this, your article title might not be right for a Wikipedia article.
• The remainder of the lead needs to summarize all the major points of the article, in proportion to the way they're covered in the body of the article. Nothing should be in the lead that's not discussed in more depth in the article body.
• Wikipedia articles need to use simple, factual language. Language like "misery" and "innocent" are more emotional than factual, and they don't have specific definitions, so you should avoid them. Terms like "victims" should be used sparingly, and only when you're talking about victims of a specific action.
• "Various forms" in the last sentence doesn't convey any specific information. Avoid filler like this.

In an event popularly known as “Black Hawk Down,” Task Force Ranger conducted an operation to capture Mohammed Farrah Aidid’s, the most powerful warlord in the Somalian capital of Mogadishu, lieutenants and officers. Though successful in their mission, Task Force Ranger experienced an extremely large and hostile resistance force, who outnumbered them by the thousands, by Aidid’s forces and local populations. As a result, Task Force Ranger sustained unexpected casualties, both in materiel resources and the lives of soldiers. The world watched in horror as the lifeless, naked bodies of American troops were dragged through the streets of Mogadishu. What was a humanitarian mission to save Somalian civilians and apprehend the criminal warlords behind such havoc soon became a horrific tragedy for the United States Military. To this day, Somalian warlords remain infamous for their culpability in the mass starvation of their people and the “Black Hawk Down” incident.

• Don't use "popular" terms. Article titles are supposed to be fairly neutral - it's much better to call it the 1993 Battle of Mogadishu and link to Battle of Mogadishu (1993).
• Copyedit what you write before moving it live, so you don't end up with things like "Mohammed Farrah Aidid’s". Also link to Wikipedia articles so readers can learn more about the topic.
• an extremely large and hostile resistance force, who outnumbered them by the thousands - Wikipedia articles are supposed to describe things neutrally. The article says 160 initial attackers and 2,000–4,000 defenders; be as specific as you can. "Extremely" is filer, and "hostile resistance force" is biased - presumably, the Somali people saw themselves as heroic defenders. What you write should be seen as fair by both sides.
• The world watched in horror as the lifeless, naked bodies of American troops were dragged through the streets of Mogadishu - don't do this kind of thing. Note how the main article describes this: After the battle, the bodies of several of the conflict's U.S. casualties...were dragged through Mogadishu's streets by crowds of local civilians and SNA forces.

For the rest of the article, use descriptive terms instead of titles. When you say "President George H.W. Bush" make sure you specify the country. You're writing about Somalia, so if the nationality of a person or an institution isn't specified, it should be because they're Somali.

You also need to make sure that everything you add to Wikipedia needs to be followed by a supporting citation, so that readers can verify the statements you've added. If a group of sentences are all supported by the same source, you can place a single reference after all of them, but you need to have at least one reference per paragraph, and you shouldn't have any statements after the final reference in a paragraph. If you need a refresher on how to add citations, please consult this training module. And history.com is not a reliable source - the quality of their content is pretty bad overall, and has a lot of factual errors and false claims. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:43, 18 April 2022 (UTC)