User talk:Bret martinsen
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Hi Bret! I think that the page about the Baxter Street Dudes is really interesting. In terms of organization, I was a little confused about what the Baxter Street Dudes really were in the beginning. In particular try clearing up and expanding on the section titled Baxter Street Dudes. I think there is a lot of opportunity to showcase how they formed and what they were in this section. Mention the Baxter Street Dudes earlier on in the History heading, too. There was a lot of cool info in there, but it was unclear that it was about the Baxter Street Dudes and not the Grand Duke's theatre. Throughout the page I could find the connection between the theatre and the group, but I had to make that connection pretty late in the article. As far as images go, add more please! I would love to see maybe a picture of their symbol or "gang sign". It would be really cool to see that history up there, and know that they had an organized and recognizable symbol/image. Other than those suggestions, your guys' article is really coming along! I have no idea what it looked like when it started but it's well on its way to becoming a full-fledged Wikipedia article!Tia Rae13 (talk) 17:45, 17 May 2018 (UTC)
Budtender- Marin, Stefanie, Andrew
[edit]Baxter Street Dudes
good non bias tone but citing sources will help the readers understand where the information was taken from Good subject organization! Hyperlinks would be beneficial Baxter street could be before Street children of New York for a chronological order Organize sentence structure will help the readers History needs to be more relevant to the subject Visual could be bigger
Tips!
Add citations where needed before final draft
History- Rephrase "changes in slavery" because slavery was abolished and the sentence is made up of fragments
History- Connecting the history of the time with Baxter Street Dudes
History- Statue of liberty was dedicated to who?
Street Children- Citations needed on some sentences
Street Children- older does not need to be capitalize
Street Children- Last sentence can be condensed to use the word street only twice
Baxter street- sentence " A prison," could be re worded to make more sense
Baxter Street- citation "belong to two different neighborhoods"
Baxter Street- Confusion with chinatown, canal street and all of New York City. What areas are important and what can be left out.